In plato's allegory of the crave socrates is tell how how they was kept in a crave from there childhood.They say that human beings living in an under ground den. Then has a mouth open towards the light and reaching all along the den. Here these people have been there since they were children. Thier legs and necks chained so that they are not able to move. They can only see before them and plus being prevented by the chains from turning their necks around. The figures of animals made of wood and stone and various materials.
Living in ignorance reminds me of being in a "cave" chained to what you only know; people who do not want to learn new things remind me of the prisoners in the passage who knew nothing more than images reflected by fire, these chains represent complacement and unwillingeness to learn. Personally I am coming out of the “cave”, I started a new experience and can felicitate myself on this change. I am now looking at a new day with bright light, standing in this new light reminds me of just seeing the sun for the first time, this glisten blinds me. By not following through with my education I was chained by ignorance, I lived in a “Cave” as if I was facing in only one direction and couldn't move. I’ve personally made the effort to enter school with a brighter thought in my mind and convinced myself after so many false attempts, that this is it, I am ready for this new world. I am willing to prove myself and to step forward into a new light so I can teach others what I have learned and what my experiences will be over the period of my success. After all, when I remember my old habitation I can't see myself going back into the "cave" I once came out of.
These people are symbolized in the passage by the released prisoner who had the chance to see light and went back to share his new knowledge with his pals but they could not understand him because they ignored reality. Socrates said “My opinion is that in the world of knowledge the idea of good appears last of all, and is seen only with an effort". How would we know what this world has to offer if we don’t give ourselves the chance to learn new things? I was once told “Knowledge is knowing what you don’t know” I want to experience what the "cave" cannot offer.
Hey Devontre, I read your blog entry and my overall impression was somewhat ok; even though I know you got the idea of the main points. Likewise I've anwered the questions below to help you attain useful information so you know what you need to work on. Just to let you know I'm being honest and I really don't want you to feel discouraged due to my analysis, but use this as feedback to help you. The entry reflects that you know the main point of the excerpt, but it is not correctly stated. It has personal opinions and feelings and it should be a summary mainly about the excerpt.
ReplyDelete1. Is the main idea (thesis) of the passage clearly and correctly stated?
The main idea of the passage is not clearly stated as it suggests diverse but repetitive statements.
2. Are the important supporting ideas stated correctly and fully?
No, because supporting ideas are stated in a "point by point" form rather than a correct sentence statment.
3. Are all (or nearly all) unimportant ideas excluded?
No
4. Is the summary in the writer’s own words?
Yes, even though it contains certain text ideas when the 2nd paragraph starts the writer begins to state personal opinions and experiences.
5. Is the summary written with few grammar/spelling/style errors?
No, 1st paragraph contains a lot of gramatical/spelling errors.
6. Does the summary retain the sense and organization of the original passage?
No.
7. Is personal opinion included in the summary?
Yes, starting from the 2nd paragraph it's mostly personal opinion.
1. Is the main idea (thesis) of the passage clearly and correctly stated?
ReplyDeleteNo, the main idea is in a repetitive and point by point form when it should be in flowing sentences.
2. Are the important supporting ideas stated correctly and fully?
No. Starting from the 2nd paragraph there is a lot of personal opinions and feelings.
3. Are all (or nearly all) unimportant ideas excluded?
No.
4. Is the summary in the writer’s own words?
Yes.
5. Is the summary written with few grammar/spelling/style errors?
No; mostly in the 1st paragraph.
6. Does the summary retain the sense and organization of the original passage?
No. It jumps from facts from the excerpt to personal opinion to facts again.
7. Is personal opinion included in the summary?
Yes.
Hey Devontre, I read your blog entry based on the allegory of the cave and my overall impression was somewhat ok; even though it reflects that you really understand the idea. Just to let you know I was completely honest about it and I don’t want you to feel discouraged because of the answers to the questions above, but look at it as feedback to correct your mistakes to improve in the next blog. The entry contains grand knowledge and comprehension from the text; but it is not clearly stated. The 1st paragraph is not understandable because the reader isn’t going to know exactly who are you talking about as “they” until they read further on, when it should be right in the beginning. It’s too repetitive and it contains grammatical and spelling errors. Starting from the 2nd paragraph you talk a lot about personal thoughts and feelings when you should be focusing on the main points from the text, then you jump back to talk about the text.
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