The article I read talks about fast food and how young teens are eating fast food alot and its not good for them. Most fast food companies publicly own and sprinkled in to the stocks porfolius of many striving Americans. One of every four hamburgers sold by the good foilks at McDonals. For example is now purchased by inner city consrumer who disproporntionately are young black men.
It was the poor and thier increasing need for cheap meals consumed twice outside the home that fueled the development of what may well be the most important fast food innovation of the past twenty years. I think the author had some good ideas in the article because he started some trueth about fast food and how most kids are consuming fast food twice a day and thats not good at all.
I feel like teens shouldn't eat fast food alot because its not healthy and people don't know how much fat sugar and salt is in there food. For example the total caloric content three of the meals has been jacked up from 680 calories to more then 1,340 calories. According to the very generous U.S dietary guidelines , 1,340 calories represent more than half of a teenagers recommended daily caloric consumption and the added calories themselves are poor protien and rich fat and carbohydrate.
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ReplyDeleteDevontre--
So far, your entries mostly copy the words of the readings, and only every now and then you actually respond with ideas of your own.
I suggest that you summarize/copy a bit less and react to what is being said more. I/we/the readers of the CATW are interested in what YOU have to say.
I agree. I would suggest opening with a few lines of summary and then react to the author's claim. Do you agree? Disagree? Partly agree? Then the rest of the essay should explain WHY you agree or disagree. What in your experience, your life, has led you to this belief/claim. You have to personalize it--your life, your neighborhood, your family--for it really to work.
ReplyDeleteHi, I am Professor Kristen Gallagher, one of the professors who trains tutors at the Writing Center. I agree with what the other professors are saying. It is really important to put the summary in your own words. It's great that you have understood the facts in the reading, but now the trick is to talk about it in your own words, the way you might talk about it to a friend in the hallway at school. Then after you summarize, talk about how this all works in your own world, your life, your neighborhood, your community. Do you see people eat McDonald's? Who eats it? Is anything this article says true, based on what you see in your own community? do you see any evidence of what this author says? The second half of a CATW essay is the place to tell us that. Good luck!
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